Heist, Chapter Ten

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Title: Heist (sequel to The Warehouse Murder)
Author: Snuffy Livingston (snuffylicious)
Category: CSI: Miami, crossover (Crossing Jordan), mystery, action/adventure
Rating: NC-17; this chapter and overall
Disclaimer: Don't own. D:
Warnings: Slash, slashy sex, violence, language, and a villain that makes you want to tear your hair out.
Complete or WiP: WIP

Chapter Ten

Comments

[seraphina_snape]

Ooh, I've been busy. Good thing about it is I got two chapters to read now... (especially since they booted CJ)

Mark? As in his first name is Mark? Wouldn't they have name tags with their last names on them, or is that a funky American custom, to have first names on something that could almost be described as a sort of uniform? (I hardly think you'd have a Doctor's first name on his white coat.)

But then again, who cares about names when young hot lab guys are hitting on Nigel? Better yet if it makes Nigel initiate office sex.

"Don't be too angry at him; I'm pretty sure he's stupid."

Ah, you're killing me here. Tomorrow, my ribs will hurt from laughing so hard.

Hmm, directly followed by nice sex. All chapters (all stories, in fact) should open with some sort of sex scene, even if it's going to be rudely interrupted by doorbells and phone calls and the like.

Oh, the reporter is a fangirl. I feel another plot point coming on. Also, marriage! I now totally expect a beautiful ceremony at the end of this story. *g*

"So, Lieutenant," she began in an introductory voice, you are a CSI for the Miami Dade crime lab, true?"

Typo. You forgot a " between voice and you.

Naturalised, my arse

Isn't it a bit strange that Greene would use British slang when he's so set against Nigel? ...God, I have to stop this pseudo-betaing. I'm sure Greene had his reasons.

"And you smell funny, too," Nigel said defiantly.

Again: ouch, my ribs.

~ sera

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I KNOW WHY DID THEY BOOT CJ WHY OH WHY *sobs*

Name tags vary from place to place. I've seen some with just first names, just last names, and both. Mark needs to be ambiguous for a reason. :3

Yay! Someone liked the one-liner! I was worried no one would laugh. D: But it's always good to know I made someone laugh. ^^

Reporter = far, far more important than she looks. You were right about the plot point.

Gah. Typo! *Scurries to FTP to fix.* Please, do go on with the pseudo-betaing; as much as you want. :D

Actually, in America we do say "_______ my arse". If you mean the spelling, that's just a personal preference. British spelling makes more sense.

[seraphina_snape]

Yes, I did mean the spelling of "arse" - I'm obviously used to the British spelling (we do learn Standard English after all) and it's pretty unusual to see it written by an American in a fandom that's not Harry Potter or another UK-based show/book. But hey, that's just random things I notice and think about.

Please, do go on with the pseudo-betaing; as much as you want.

You should not say these things if you don't mean them. I'm the sort of person that can't read anything without correcting stuff. (Not so good if the one you're (unknowingly) correcting if you own English professor. She isn't over ti yet and it's been three years...)

~ sera